One day I was going on a long stay with the night zookeeper
when I got there a pig bird flew over us then as
soon as I walked in there were two parts of the zoo, next to the zoo there was
a hotel. Suddenly, the door of the hotel burst open and there was the night
zookeeper standing in front of my watery, glistening eyes. The night zookeeper
walked towards me and welcomed me with a pink
bunny that could fly. Then he showed me round. The hotel was like a marvellous castle then there was a noisy scream…
I LOVE YOU 100WORD CHALLENGE I WONDER WHAT HAPPENS NEXT.YOU HAVE USED LOTS OF DESCRIBING WORDS LIKE WATERY,AND GLISTENING.YOU COULD DESCRIBE THE CASTLE.!)
ReplyDeleteHi Katie O, your story is quite nice. The suspense created would make your readers want to know what happens next. You need to make proper use of punctuation though.
ReplyDeleteThe first sentence for instance could read like this: "One day, I was going on a long stay with he night zookeeper. When I got there...
Good effort, keep blogging.
Hi Katie, what a lovely story. I enjoyed the way you described your eyes as watery and glistening and it helped me to imagine exactly what you would have looked like. Remember your full stops and capital letters. I look forward to your next post!
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