This is a wonderful description of an incredible animal. A cross between a falcon and a fish would be interesting, especially as you've described a very large animal. I don't think I would want it to land on my roof. :)
You have made good use of simile in your description. Such comparisons help the reader understand your creature.
Dear Pav, Well done, great 100WC, love the idea of a bird crossed with a fish. A great use of similies and a amazing story to read. From alf and pat.:]
What an interesting and imaginative creature you have described for the Night Zoo Keeper. It certainly sounds huge and would probably appear fierce some, but I wonder whether it actually would be. You could very easily extend this into a longer piece of creative writing.
Hello Pav,
ReplyDeleteThis is a wonderful description of an incredible animal. A cross between a falcon and a fish would be interesting, especially as you've described a very large animal. I don't think I would want it to land on my roof. :)
You have made good use of simile in your description. Such comparisons help the reader understand your creature.
I hope you keep entering the 100WC. Well done!
@RossMannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher, NSW, Australia
Dear Pav,
ReplyDeleteWell done, great 100WC, love the idea of a bird crossed with a fish. A great use of similies and a amazing story to read. From alf and pat.:]
Hello Pav,
ReplyDeleteWhat an interesting and imaginative creature you have described for the Night Zoo Keeper. It certainly sounds huge and would probably appear fierce some, but I wonder whether it actually would be. You could very easily extend this into a longer piece of creative writing.
Thank you for sharing your work with the 100wc.
Mrs Shaw(Team100wc)