One day I was out fishing in a fishing boat and was just about to run out of bait. Suddenly, the weather changed for the worse; huge waves started to crash against the side of the boat! It started to calm down, but then the most horrendous storm whipped up! A hurricane started which was most devastating. Gallons of water went flying into the hurricane and then dropped making a splash so loud it rattled the sky! When the water hit, a colossal whirlpool started. The boat was heading towards the whirlpool, with the captain trying his hardest to steer us away...
By Alex - Poplar
Hi Alex,
ReplyDeleteYour atory is fun to read and extremely well-written. Thanks for submitting it to the 100wc.. I particularly liked the phrase 'rattled the sky'. You were having a spot of bad luck weren't you? Not only did you almost run out of bait but you had to weather (pun) a gale,a storm, a hurricane and a whirlpool. It couldn't really get much worse!!
From: Lucas D. (Saint John Vianney)
ReplyDeleteHi Alex, nice story, certainly shows interest and leaves suspense. This story would be nice to have an end, but this is very good being left as a cliffhanger. Very good story.
This was awesome!The ending was good because it made the reader guess on his own what happened next.
ReplyDeleteI love you put a lot of creativity into it. Great story
ReplyDeleteKennedy C. (St. John Vianney)