Monday, 3 February 2014

Joes 100 word challenge!

(Typed by Joe)

A letter came through the door. Edwena opened the letter and a fateful frown came on her face. A tear trickled down her cheek as she read and read. The one tear multiplied and she began to cry. Killed in action it read. How could she tell her children.6 months later they were going for a walk. Far off on the other side of the field she saw a blurred figure “Henry?” she whispered. She walked toward the man. Then a run. Then a sprint “dada” shouted the boy “kids, Edwena your home your home Henry
Please let Joe know what you think!
Posted by at 11:49

17 comments:

  1. Daisydunn6 February 2014 at 20:48

    I think it builds up a lot of tension, Well done Joe!

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  2. gabe and ella26 February 2014 at 10:56

    BRILLIANT STORY JOE !!!!!!!:)

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  3. Anonymous7 March 2014 at 18:28

    there is only 97 words! but it is still great!

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  4. Ernesto, St. John Vianney USA19 March 2014 at 14:14

    100 words! Wow, you did a good job! That's a lot of words.

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  5. Liz,St. John Vianney19 March 2014 at 14:17

    I bet you had to think of all those words.

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  6. Carter, St. John Vianney USA19 March 2014 at 14:18

    I like your story is that really 100 words? Good job.

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  7. Jacinda, St. John Vianney USA19 March 2014 at 14:18

    100 words! How long did it take you. Maybe you should try 300 words.

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  8. Jake, St. John Vianney USA19 March 2014 at 14:18

    I love your 100 word challenge. That's a lot of words.

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  9. Grace,St.johnVianneyUSA19 March 2014 at 14:20

    Good job! 100 words wow is your dad in the army?

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  10. Dylan St. John Vianney USA19 March 2014 at 14:21

    Wow that's cool!

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  11. Riley,St.John Vianney USA19 March 2014 at 14:22

    I like how you did a hundred words good work.

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  12. Paul, St. John Vianney19 March 2014 at 14:23

    Nice Job Joe!

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  13. Kera,st.John Vianney USA19 March 2014 at 14:24

    100 words so cool !

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  14. LukeZ st.john Vinanney19 March 2014 at 14:25

    100 words that's a lot of work good job !!!!

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  15. Lilli, St.John Vianney USA19 March 2014 at 14:26

    Wow you have a really good story. You also used 100 WORDS.

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  16. molly lockley28 March 2014 at 07:42

    GREAT STORY JOE

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  17. Liam1 April 2014 at 10:12

    I am lost for words that is so good

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