Friday 19 April 2013

Sophie's tense tingling 100 Word challenge!

(Typed by Sophie)

The ice was freezing on my shaking hands, my fingers were sticking together I could see icicles hanging over me. I tried to make another step but I was so cold my legs were as wobbly as jelly, suddenly I could feel myself slipping, I was trying to grab hold of the ice. I was really, really scared but I never ever fell, so I followed my journey to the top of the mountain. I stepped again my hands were still frozen I could not stop shaking my legs like a chainsaw, but I managed to get to the top in the end.

Thank you for reading my 100 word challenge,
Sophie

6 comments:

  1. epic 100 word challenge sophie from jamie in poplar

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  2. sofie you should do all my 100wc LOL and well done to mrs pugh that story was epic LOL!!!
    HI POPLAR HI BLUE 1AND 2 HI ORANGE 1,2 AND 3 HI GREEN i love this blog lol hi izzy

    from jammy dojer

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  3. i ment jammie not m w13 May 2013 at 16:44

    that was epic

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  4. LOL you are good at story's! you need to do my 100 word challenge's :D

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  5. Hi Sophie,

    What a great story! Your descriptions were so good it really made me get a sense of how cold you were. I think it was because you used some great vocabulary. Well done on the similes - especially the chainsaw one. Have a look at the sentence which begins 'I stepped again...' Can you see where you may need to put a full stop? Sometimes short sentences really add tension and impact.

    Great story Sophie. I hope to see more of your 100WC on the blog.
    Mrs Prior

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  6. wow a alsome 100 WC there you made it so creepy i was hacked in a good 100 WC

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