Thursday 4 October 2012

Lauren's 100 Word Challenge

There is was standing on the podium giving me a snarling look in the eye. A big frozen alien. It had been there for hundreds of years. I decided to walk away because it was boring! Suddenly, something grabbed me. It turned me around. I was face to face with the alien. My heart was pumping like a needle, pumping into someone's arm one hundred times. I could see the look in his eyes, he was about to drop me. He did! I was falling from a great height, through the sky. I didn't know what to do...
Posted by at 19:44

6 comments:

  1. Ali (Old Hammondtown School)5 October 2012 at 14:43

    I love your story! I enjoyed reading it every much.

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  2. Alex6 October 2012 at 08:47

    Hi
    Great story my favourite bit was when the alien grabbed you. I really liked the frozen alien it sounded a bit like a massive lollipop

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  3. Leyburn School6 October 2012 at 21:36

    Hi Lauen
    What a great entry for this weeks 100WC. You have thought about the prompt and created a really good story using interesting vocabulary and a fast pacing theme. Well done.
    Mrs Robinson 100WC Team

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  4. Thomas N7 October 2012 at 19:08

    This is a very interesting story and I would like to read a lot more from you.
    Well done, keep on writing.

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  5. Mrs Hall-McNair7 October 2012 at 20:06

    I like the way that you have thought about how to get the reader to understand how you are feeling when the alien grabs you. Well done.

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  6. Tre9 October 2012 at 01:20

    I like where the alien grabed you.

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